Even before the first rays of sunshine slipped through the edges of the curtains, she realized she might need some help getting the items she had scribbled on the back of an old envelope before crawling under the covers that night. It was hard for her to know if she was coming down with something, exhausted, or dare she even mention the word. The sound of approaching footsteps on the wooded floor in the hall followed by the click of the bedroom door being opened brought her awake, if not fully alert.
Oh, oh, it looks like you aren’t feeling on top of the world this morning, so how about we change our plans and just spend a quiet weekend at home instead. Are you up to trying to eat a piece of toast and drinking a cup of chamomile tea while I make a quick trip to the store to pick up these things on your list?
He knew he was making the right decision to pitch in when she mumbled slowly, Thanks honey, and. . .could you add a box of Ham and Armour to the list?
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A moving description of someone who is at the end of her energy - whatever the reason. I like the 'or dare she even mention the word'. You leave it open, but satisfy me that she's with someone who will look after her.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Yes, considering her state of health that day, it was probably best to have someone taking care of her.
Deletewell done. good six and good use of the cue. sometimes it's better not to even whisper the words.
ReplyDeleteThanks. I had to resort to the use of a spoonerism to work the cue into the story this week.
Delete"Even before the first rays of sunshine slipped through the edges of the curtains,.."
ReplyDeleteMost excellent scene set, Pat. A beautiful peak through the window of 2 people's lives. When one is not up to par, the other is there to fill in for both.
Your use of the prompt word was as if I'd just utilized Prof. Egmont's time mechanism :D
Thanks Denise. I am not familiar with Prof. Egmont's time mechanism, but if his creativity was the one who twisted Arm and Hammer around to be spoken as Ham and Armour, I am grateful for him. I needed some way to insert the prompt into the SSS. HaHa
DeleteA touching tale of companionship and caring.
ReplyDeleteFord.
Thank you so much.
DeleteIt is good that he is taking care of her.
ReplyDeleteShe appeared to be in need of some care that day.
DeleteWhat an excellent example of how much a Six Sentence Story can offer we Readers.
ReplyDeleteEngaging, yet with a sense of suspense, a glimpse of a life while still hinting at more that, we already know, we will care about.
Nice
Thanks, Clark. Glad you enjoyed this.
DeleteIt's not easy for either of them. Well told!
ReplyDeleteI am guessing you are right that it isn't easy for either one of them, at least on that particular day. I kind of wonder if he figured out what product she was really wanting him to buy.
DeleteHad me enthralled with anticipation but I have no idea what the last sentence means. Perhaps I'm just thicker than most. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks. I resorted to using a spoonerism in that last line. Due to her being a little under the weather, she mixed up her words. What she really wanted him to get was a box of Arm and Hammer baking soda. Over the years it has been used in a variety of ways, according to this link. https://en.wikisource.org/wiki/A_Friend_in_Need
DeleteThis week, I am learning something new about American culture, including the names of the toothpaste company and the food company. :-) (I googled them.) If you hadn't mentioned "Arm and Hammer" in your reply to a comment above, I would have been at a loss.
ReplyDeleteI realized after reading some of the comments that what I thought was kind of obvious wasn't as obvious as I thought. HaHa
DeleteAha, the comments helped me out before I had to resort to Ms Google! I hadn't come across Arm and Hammer either (sorry, another dumb (ex) Brit. Beautifully told, Pat, especially that first scene-setting phrase.
ReplyDeleteThank you. No need to apologize. There are so many times when I read a SSS and think to myself, there is so much I don't understand. HaHa I always appreciate your comments.
DeleteI love how you worked the prompt in. Clever! I love this story, too.
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