Summer has arrived and the heat is on to link up to a weekly blog hop hosted by Denise of Girlie On The Edge’s Blog. What a befitting prompt she has given all the participatory writers this week. By the way, this blog hop is open to beginning as well as very seasoned writers. Take a peek at some of the other Six Sentence Stories - Season.
The link stays open until late Saturday night, so there is still time to compose a story using only six sentences and share your story.
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Like a flash in the black of night, it was over, yet there seemed no way to move forward without both retreating cautiously at first.
The barbed words were brief but searing and had pushed one forward and the other back, widening the season of discontentment they hadn’t even realized was encroaching and ready to pounce.
Each grabbing hold of the nearest rope, one slippery and stretchy and the other tightly woven and strong, which exacerbated the differences that were brewing and fermented whatever remained of their relationship.
Eventually whispered words. . .let go, just let go. . .seemingly coming from out of thin air, blew away some of the pain, and the dolor began to depart and pride was replaced by humility and a clearer view of what had taken place and why.
A melding of differences brought with it a commonality and revelatory understanding of themselves and each other that was needed to move forward.
Carefully she folded the paper and returned it to where it had been, buried between some unidentified sepia photos of a young couple and an assortment of embroidered hankies topped by a little sachet filled with rose scented potpourri inside what had once been a stationery box.
Beautifully written, Pat. Especially liked 'The barbed words were brief but searing and had pushed one forward and the other back, widening the season of discontentment they hadn’t even realized was encroaching and ready to pounce.' Left me wanting to know so much more about the characters and what happened.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I agree that it would be interesting to know more about the characters and what happened. Perhaps another story might emerge sometime with these characters. For now, it is a mystery and pure fiction.
DeleteWell done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Mimi.
DeleteGood one, Pat. An excellent relationship tug-of-war. I love the idea of discontent "encroaching and ready to pounce" - like it's a wild animal. Cool too the prompt word this work is in the name of your blog :)
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Thank you. I didn't even notice that connection to the name of my blog. That is what happens when something becomes so familiar that one doesn't see something obviously there. HaHa
DeleteBrilliant, Pat! You leave us all wanting more of this couple's story.
ReplyDeleteThanks. Maybe I will have to try to continue this story sometime when I want to challenge myself.
DeleteExcellent Pat, you've used some wonderfully descriptive phrases throughout the tale. More?
ReplyDeleteMy Six!
Thank you for the encouraging words. I should tried expanding this story.
Deletevividly writen. barbed words...great phrase.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
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ReplyDeleteVery cool wordage.**
* the highest of compliments for a Six that reads like a metaphor wrapped in a life's reflection.
** that kinda makes 'Yow' almost eloquent sounding, doesn't it?
Outstanding Six
Thanks, Clark. That is what happens sometimes when one wakes up in the middle of the night and when getting back to sleep doesn't happen the mind starts playing around with the prompt to a SSS and getting up and to write is the only option.
DeleteBeautifully, powerfully and tenderly written Six, Pat.
ReplyDeleteI too found the 2nd sentence to be very potent.
Thank you, Denise.
DeleteIntense piece, Pat.
ReplyDeleteYou packed a load of emotion into this.
Thank you for your comments.
DeleteYes, there's a lot there,even if we don't see the entire picture. It's a sharp snapshot for sure.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much.
Delete'The barbed words were brief but searing...'
ReplyDeleteOh how true this often is.
But a relationship worked through and powerfully expressed.
I particularly love the poetry of the last paragraph.
Thank you so much for your comments.
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